Well, if I have to be blunt (with all due respect of the translator) : It needs a little love of an editor.
The grammar, and all that stuff of the (complex?) english language is a only a bit messy (though, if you have already read other mtl you are surely experienced this).
But, when you talk about the story, it is fairly good and interesting. The MC is not and OP one or a Soft, he is just a very realistic one with a good amount of Alpha in him (if you know what I'm talking about).
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Like he isn't a really virgin one (in fact he loses it in the really early chapter of the novel) and he accept and aproach the heroines with an adult mentality that is likely rarely to see.
The heroines may be a little annoying for some people (again, only for some people)
important point: you have to accept in the get-go that there is a dark past on some of them (a reaaally dark past)
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r*pe and stuff, all in the past, like I said (so no NTR) but still...
and last: until this point the story is enterely in the management of the territory.
Having said all of that, I recommend it at least to read the first chapters and see if you like it. Pd: it has some illustrations.