Padded the chapter without it looking like extra padding. Spot the pads.
Before leaving Rosendal, I dropped by the Merchantâs Guild to return the mansion key and settle the rent. [9] Before I could leave though, I was stopped by the Merchants Guildâs Guild Master and ended up selling quite a few Drops worth of Higher Species Dungeon Cow and Pig meat to them.
[9] Woah, these people were kind of intense.
Once that was over, I quickly made my way to the Adventurerâs Guild to say my goodbyes to Giannino-san.
[4] âOh, youâre leaving already?â Giannino-san looked a little sad.
[6] âYes, well, I had fun in this city. So, thank you for having me here,â
[4] âOh no, we should be the ones thanking you. Thanks to you, the guild managed to secure a lot of meat from Higher Species Dungeon Cows and Pigs.â
[4] âAhaha, well, thanks to the mission, I was able to secure a lot of good meat too,â
[6] âUfufu, youâre sure thereâs no way for us to convince you to stay longer?â
[4] âHaha, I need to be on my way. But I will definitely be back!â
[6] âOho, we look forward to seeing you again~â
Eventually, I made my way to the city gates and-
âBig brother! Youâre so slow!â
[4] âOh my, itâs Lewis and everyone. Maynard, Enzo, youâre here too [5]. Are you all here to see me off?â
âWell, we did owe you big time, after all,â said Lewis.
âItâs only natural for a disciple to see off his Master!â
âThatâs right, thatâs right!â
I was a little embarrassed, but happy to be called Master by these two enthusiastic boys.
âBig brother, youâll be back again?â
âOf course, Iâll definitely be back for the Dungeon Meat Festival if nothing else,â
âReally? Youâve made some really good weapons for us, Iâll be stronger by next year!â
âYeah, weâll be able to defeat more monsters and bring back more meat than before!â
âOu!!â
The Orphanage Adventurers seemed as lively and excitable as ever.
âItâs nice to see such enthusiasm, but be careful not to get injured.â
âOf course! We always keep our safety in mind.â
âThatâs right. Thatâs why we fight in groups. Right, everyone?â
âYeah!!!â
âOh my, is that so? Be sure to work hard. The next time I come, how about I cook up the meat you guys hunted?â
âWoohoo!! Yeahh!!!â [5]
âMaster, we will do our best to practice and improve the recipes we inherited from you,â said Maynard.
âThe Director already told us. Thanks to Master, our food stall would be completed very soon,â
âOu, Iâm glad to hear that,â [3] a small worry at the back of my mind disappeared. Iâm glad that the Director turned out to be the good guy he seems to be.
âItâs all thanks to you, Master,â
âThank you so much,â
âIâve already taught you the basics, so the rest is up to you. Good luck!â
[5] âHehe, the next time Master comes, I want you to be blown away by how delicious our food is,â
âYeah, it will be so delicious that Master will moan after taking a bite~â
âHahaha, I look forward to it,â
[8] There did not seem to be anything else to say after that. I looked at the 40 over sets of eyes staring brightly at me.
[8] âWell, instead of goodbye, I shall say âSee you next yearâ.â
[8] âUuuhh, see you next year, Big Brother!!!!â
[8] âSee you next year, Master!!!â [5] [5] [5]
I turned to my familiars. âWell, shall we?â
ââUmuâŚââ
[9] âFer, are you crying?â
[9] ââHumph! It is your imagination!!ââ
[9] âHehâŚâ
I walked through the gates, waving at the kids now and then.
âRosendal sure is a nice place to stay,â
ââUmu, itâs a good place with delicious food.ââ
ââIâll second that!!ââ
Still, for me, Carelina is where I feel most comfortable.
âUmu, let us go back quickly. The next dungeon challenge would be a difficult one, I hope.â
Ugh⌠Fer, you still remember thatâŚ
ââOh, nice! Isnât it just next to this country? Why donât we go there right away?ââ
Ugh, this Dora-chanâŚ
ââDungeonâ?ââ
Sui? Did you wake up at the word âdungeonâ?
âNope, we are returning to Carelina first,â
âHumph, you just want to delay our trip to the dungeon again,â
AarghhâŚ
âWell? Am I right?â
âNo, no, who says Iâm delaying anything? AhahahaâŚâ
âThen, why not go straight to the difficult dungeon now? We are closer to the dungeon than Carelina-â
âW-we have to go back first! Thatâs right, we have to go home and check on our house and servants. Itâs been nearly three months, Iâm sure everyoneâs worried. Itâs really time to go back!â
âNo problem, we will return now. However, our next trip after that⌠humph, Iâm sure you should know, yes?â
[9] Eehhh, is this a threat? Is he threatening me after I made fun of him crying just now?
ââŚyes, I get it. Weâll go challenge the Kingdom of Elmanâs dungeonâŚâ
âHumph, thatâs all I need to know,â
ââYahoo! A high difficulty dungeon! Awesome! Letâs goooo!! [5]ââ
ââA dungeon~? Yay~~!ââ
âNow that itâs been decided, let us return. Get on,â
Hahhh, I guess it canât be helped.
Reluctantly, I got on Ferâs back and⌠woah!
âHey, Fer, arenât you going a bit fast?â
âHow many times have you travelled on my back? Just get used to it already!â
âWait, but this is too fast! Iâll fall off!â [5]
âHumph, just grab on and keep quiet, Iâm going to speed up!â
âNo no no, donât do that! Iâll die! Wawa-waaaaaaâŚ.â
[9] This is definitely revenge for pointing out his maidenly tears!!
[9] Ferrr!!!
Fer: I did not cry
Gumi: Sure you didnât
Fer: It was not canon, it was never in the canon. Therefore, it never happened
Gumi: You keep telling yourself that, you big fluff
Fer: Gununu, curse you, creative editor!!
Gumi: Even with the padding, the chapter only just grazed past 900, tch
[1] Structural Change: Combine 2 paragraphs
[2] Structural Change: Combine 3 paragraphs
[3] Structural Change: Combine paragraph & dialogue
[4] Structural Change: Change passive sentence to dialogue
[5] Delete Repetitive or Pointless Information.
[6] Additional Information for Aesthetic Purpose
[7] Add Dialogue Tag
[8] Creative Licence Taken â Fixed the âgoodbyeâ scene. Made it more emotional instead of a repeat of a series of dialogue goodbyes.
[9] Padded the chapter without it looking like extra padding.